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Origins And Originality by ~RoninGaleria:iconRoninGaleria:



It could be the truth but most likely I’m feeding a fairy tale,
Writing is an art and a passion delivering beauty to the blind in Braille,
Poetry or prose, it all requires talent like painting a perfect picture of a lonely rose,
In-depth with intricate detail or briefly cryptic if that's what you choose to disclose,
Preaching an anthem from a never before celebrated street intersection,
Words of wisdom being rapidly transferred and stream lined into street diction,
Expressing old feelings of tension and questioning the whereabouts of a lost pension,
Hitting every section with stead fast traction it's all coming out without hesitation,
Kickin' back in a freestyle speakeasy with the world's weight finally lifted,
Turning it over in my head like a sculpture I just crafted,
An aromatic piece that is gently scented, rotated and perfected,
It was there all along nested and pointed,
With abilities I rented I molded it into something fully constructed.
©2005-2009 ~RoninGaleria
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Author's Comments

Something that just came to me, doing some warm up writing seemed to really pay off and I wanted to get back to my roots, I suppose, and do a rhyming poem.

The poem itself is self explanatory, I put it in fixed for the soul fact of it rhyming, it doesnt really have a measured meter or a system of which lines are supposed to rhyme (ie couplets or alternating) but fixed can include a "home bred style" which I think is fitting for a Urban piece.

The references to the Urban genre are obvious when you see them, also the style is urban itself or atleast I'd like to look at it that way. :)

Comments are greatly appreciated critical ones are taken into consideration but 4/5 i'm not going to make any changes.

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:iconengel08:
A joy to create something captured a observation of the urban life. It's almost cinematic. Somepeople would say visual but I say cinimatic.
I thought of a house then a street and then a red hand of a crosswalk. It brought up memories of the city of the lights and the hardness. Briefly stopped by the moist breeze or the touch of earth and art in my hands.

If I were to somehow get one person published.If I were to put my time into bringing out the potential of an individual concerning poetry.
It would be you.
Hold on to this.For high school.
Is just the beggining.

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:icontha-paper:
dude, wow, that was just a warm up (O_O)......amazing

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James
Always
Makes
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Smile!
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:iconroningaleria:
it was the first poem AFTER some warming up :P

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~RoninGaleria My comments carry honesty 98% of the time, bear this in mind.
:icontha-paper:
oooooooooo...............still it's tight

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James
Always
Makes
Everyone
Smile!
(^_^)
:iconteenagekiss:
This was amazing. Excellent work. It is well written and well drawn out-- I loved it.

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Fashion is a form of ugliness so intolerable we have to alter it every six months.
:iconroningaleria:
thanks a ton :)

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~RoninGaleria My comments carry honesty 98% of the time, bear this in mind.
:iconcooper:
Aye writing is such a magical thing. One word selection I'd like to point out is in your second last line "long" should be "along" I think.... other than that a beautifully painted respectful ode to writers. take care
:iconpickledcows:
absolutly amazing. it flowed wonderfully, you didn't even notice that you had stopped rhyming it all just fit together so well, i have no suggestions for making it better you have mastered it already

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:iconkaleidx:
Nice.. it flows very night and the rhyming fits. Great work.

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:iconeclipsedvoice:
Agreed. Writings don't get enough appreciation nowadays.
Nice flow.

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